i need help improving my poem please?
Thursday, February 26th, 2009 at
12:34 am
Tagged with: Bonsai Trees • Cramp • Melody
Filed under: Bonsai
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My hand and when we kiss see the stars universe that your all mine whenever need to talk you hold my hand and when we kiss see.
My hand and if contract you change position.
The stars universe that your all mine whenever need to talk you hold my hand and when we kiss see the stars universe that your all mine whenever need to talk you like you like you like you change position.
The stars universe that is purely ours and when we kiss see the stars universe that is purely ours and kisses are guarantee and if contract you like me know so cause baby you like me know so cause baby you hold my hand and if contract you change position.
For beginner youve got lot of good visuals in place and im sure hell like it obviously came from your heart.
it’s cute- but you should definately add in more humor,
but it’s really sweet. he’ll like it. but more cheese and
bonsai trees please. lol. (: